Revision Strategies
On this page I will be demonstrating my work and taking you along with me to discuss the revisions I have had on these papers. There are two main writing projects we worked throughout the quarter and that is our Literature review, which was about gathering scientific research on the species we wanted to research and to begin to think what we want advocate for them, and our Advocacy Project, which is where we write about our chosen species problems and discuss and argue why it is important; as well as give solutions to the problem. Down below you will see the revisions I had when working on my Literature Review and my Advocacy Project. You will see how my work has become better with time. Thank you for taking your time to view my work.
Literature Review
Revision 1
Here I prioritized this revision since I was told that the questioned seemed to e misplaced and throws off the flow of my paper. So I had it removed which made the paragraph flow better and went straight to the point of my paragraph and statement.
Revision 2
I changed the wording in this sentence to make sound more educational and sophisticated. Instead of leaving the term "got" I changed it to "received." It gives it a more scholarly tone and since this is a scholarly paper I want to make those simple changes.
Revision 3
I was told by my peers that I had a mistake here on my spelling. If I didn't have someone tell me that I misspelled a word I wouldn't have noticed. These are important as well because they could abruptly change the tone.
Advocacy Project
Revision 1
As we all know titles of a paper play just as much as role as the entirety of the paper. Here I received a comment regarding my title saying that I should put in parenthesis the most common name of the species, so I did just that. It is true that I shouldn't assume everyone knows the scientific name of a dolphin.
Revision 2
I received a comment here regarding my transitioning between these two paragraphs. Topic sentence are huge deal since we want it to be as smooth as possible and as well as introducing our next paragraph, if done wrong we can have our readers lost. So what I did is made it more clearer than just flat out saying how old they are I added some words to create the transition better.
Revision 3
Throughout our papers we have to make sure that we do not have run on sentences and as well as sentences that could be combined. Here I got a comment stating that these two sentences could become one and after analyzing and reading it, it is true. It could be combined with a semi-colon. It's important for us to correct these mistakes to make our paper more efficient.